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[禁忌之恋] 【爷爷的春天】作者：不详

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开头写的不错，不过确实是短了些。我原以为爷爷会在孙女自己吃的饭里面下药，没想到居然是这么直接，有点可惜了，孙女反抗也太薄弱了点，H描写也简单了写，最让我怨念的是：结束的也太快太突然了吧，刚有些硬起就硬生生的给断掉了，全文完的也太不给力了，建议写续文，不然前面铺垫浪费了。

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